20/2/13
gif puzzle movement of squares
gif of city building's growing
add artists
Lynette Miller
28th/2/13
verbal feedback
print film and upload photo
photograph london buildings
direct links to marcus bricks project
urbanisation
print film and upload photo
photograph london buildings
direct links to marcus bricks project
urbanisation
7/2/14
Create Artist and me sections showing your work alongside an analysed image and make comparisons.
Show some more columbia road images
Create visual mind map showing what yo have done and where you are going and artists that have influenced you (Look at Sophie and Mary from other group for ideas)
Fruit and veg enlargements
Notes and analyse of artists is needed throughout. More Artist are needed for each sections street , market , movement R(omain Laurent)
Create Artist and me sections showing your work alongside an analysed image and make comparisons.
Show some more columbia road images
Create visual mind map showing what yo have done and where you are going and artists that have influenced you (Look at Sophie and Mary from other group for ideas)
Fruit and veg enlargements
Notes and analyse of artists is needed throughout. More Artist are needed for each sections street , market , movement R(omain Laurent)
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James Curatorship feedback
Some general bullet points below and then I have reworded and highlighted some
spelling corrections. A good start but ensure you reread everything you write
to see how it flows as an analysis. The content you have is excellent just try
and use a few more technical terms (that you do know!) to help guide the reader
around the image you are analysing.
·
Titles, dates and
artist for each image
Bibliography at the bottom of the page
Each analytical
paragraph starts: this is a photo of….this photo….this is another photo…. Change this so there is some variety for
reader.
When referring to the
photographers always use their surname, not William or
Vivian.
Copy and paste all this
text into a word document and spell check it. There are a few words with capital
that shouldn’t have and visa versa, also use of there and their is confused
through this text.
‘This photo’: potential
replacements:
in the
fore/mid/background….
The image
depicts….
This close up shot
emphasises….
The angle McCullin
uses….
The central
figures…..
Intro– this needs to be more of a press release style. So
write in 3rd person
rather than using ‘I’ You talk about a book but need to talk about an exhibition
instead. Introduce your theme here and describe the similarities and differences
between the photographers.
Exhibition Leaflet – this text written here needs to be included
in your press release introduction, delete ‘exhibition
leaflet’Good information written here just ensure you label
images
Vivian needs a capital ‘V’ a few places throughout this text,
spell check your work.Vivian Dorothea Maier, that was born 1st February 1926 in New
York. She worked in new york as a nanny for several
familys spending most of her money on film and storage for her film.
The subject which is the drunken man is centred in the frame with the less important
people closer to the edges of the frame. The police officer and gentleman are
standing strait to show there power of the drunk who is being dragged along the
road as he is not able to stand on his own.
The main focus of activity is in the centre of the picture: a drunken man being
carried by a police officer and a gentleman. The two men carrying the stooping
figure are upright and have a firm, powerful hold over the man they are
dragging,the user the viewer It shows how all the soldiers are the same they all look the same and they walk at
the same speed and at the same time.
From this viewpoint the uniformity of the soldiers is emphasied:
they all wear the same and walk in time.
Some general bullet points below and then I have reworded and highlighted some
spelling corrections. A good start but ensure you reread everything you write
to see how it flows as an analysis. The content you have is excellent just try
and use a few more technical terms (that you do know!) to help guide the reader
around the image you are analysing.
·
Titles, dates and
artist for each image
Bibliography at the bottom of the page
Each analytical
paragraph starts: this is a photo of….this photo….this is another photo…. Change this so there is some variety for
reader.
When referring to the
photographers always use their surname, not William or
Vivian.
Copy and paste all this
text into a word document and spell check it. There are a few words with capital
that shouldn’t have and visa versa, also use of there and their is confused
through this text.
‘This photo’: potential
replacements:
in the
fore/mid/background….
The image
depicts….
This close up shot
emphasises….
The angle McCullin
uses….
The central
figures…..
Intro– this needs to be more of a press release style. So
write in 3rd person
rather than using ‘I’ You talk about a book but need to talk about an exhibition
instead. Introduce your theme here and describe the similarities and differences
between the photographers.
Exhibition Leaflet – this text written here needs to be included
in your press release introduction, delete ‘exhibition
leaflet’Good information written here just ensure you label
images
Vivian needs a capital ‘V’ a few places throughout this text,
spell check your work.Vivian Dorothea Maier, that was born 1st February 1926 in New
York. She worked in new york as a nanny for several
familys spending most of her money on film and storage for her film.
The subject which is the drunken man is centred in the frame with the less important
people closer to the edges of the frame. The police officer and gentleman are
standing strait to show there power of the drunk who is being dragged along the
road as he is not able to stand on his own.
The main focus of activity is in the centre of the picture: a drunken man being
carried by a police officer and a gentleman. The two men carrying the stooping
figure are upright and have a firm, powerful hold over the man they are
dragging,the user the viewer It shows how all the soldiers are the same they all look the same and they walk at
the same speed and at the same time.
From this viewpoint the uniformity of the soldiers is emphasied:
they all wear the same and walk in time.
Practical responce
Where is the images that you saw in the museum of the guy pushing
the create needs to be put alongside your Barcelona work.
Analysis 2 images by mark Jackson and make sure to make
comparisons with your own work. This could take the form of the Artist and me
place yours alongside one of his
images.
The 3d work is excellent very exciting but it would be good to
show how you have done it because a lot of work has gone in to creating the
picture. A series of these images highlighting each market placed alongside one
another could be very powerful. Also maybe you could record the sounds of each
environment and put them into each video.
Markets still to be revisited
Billingsgate Fish market, Smithfeild meat market revisited, Columbia flower
market
Where is the images that you saw in the museum of the guy pushing
the create needs to be put alongside your Barcelona work.
Analysis 2 images by mark Jackson and make sure to make
comparisons with your own work. This could take the form of the Artist and me
place yours alongside one of his
images.
The 3d work is excellent very exciting but it would be good to
show how you have done it because a lot of work has gone in to creating the
picture. A series of these images highlighting each market placed alongside one
another could be very powerful. Also maybe you could record the sounds of each
environment and put them into each video.
Markets still to be revisited
Billingsgate Fish market, Smithfeild meat market revisited, Columbia flower
market